WMHB: The Internet-friendly Guard

We’ve been working on the edits of the Evenfall rewrites this weekend. We broke the book into quadrants so we’ve been working on different chapters. I’m editing a scene in Evenfall chapter 22, and I cannot tell you how much I want to write something in dialogue I really just can’t do. But if I can’t stick it in story, at least I can blog about it.

Behind a cut for spoilers in Evenfall chapter 22.

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(Not So Very) Important Conversations: Poor Boyd

Two separate conversations, yesterday and today.

9/28/2013

Ais:  good idea to use scrivener
Santino:  i know im so smart
dont you wish you were this smart
Ais:  every moment of my life
Santino:  too bad
Ais:  i know
i should probably just kill myself and let you do all the editing yourself
Santino:  you are emo
Ais:  lol i thought you were going to say “Okay, Boyd”
Santino:  LOL

9/29/2013

Ais:  it wouldnt bother you if i did that?
sweet im totally doing that
Santino:  why would i care
Ais:  idk
Santino:  i care about barely anything
im basically boyd
Ais:  lol
Santino:  but ghetto

Poor Boyd. He gets no respect.

 

Notes to Self: Scene cuts and growth

I’m not sure if I’ve ever mentioned it anywhere, but in the process of writing the series we would often run through a chapter multiple times in editing. I’m particularly a waffler on these things, and a bit of a pack rat when it comes to hoarding rather than deleting.

Before we found gdocs as a main way to write stories, we did most of our editing in Word. Boyd is, obviously, very introspective as a character so especially in Evenfall I had a hard time figuring out which bits to keep and which to remove in his narration– so that the thought process was still explained well enough for readers to get where he was coming from, but so that it wasn’t way too much. (That’s one of the things I want to address the most in Evenfall 3.0 edits)

In addition to that, Boyd didn’t always react the way I expected he would when we first plotted out scenes. Sometimes a small thing in the way Hsin said or did something made Boyd react in a way that was counterproductive for what we’d planned for the scene, but was more realistic to him as a person. This meant there were some scenes we wrote, and rewrote, and REWROTE… (And it wasn’t just Boyd doing this; Hsin would, too. Those little bastards didn’t know how to make writing this series easy on us)

I’m not sure if it sounds strange to anyone to refer to Boyd as someone with his own mind but that’s how he always felt to me. I just knew this or that felt right for him, and sometimes it wasn’t until later that I understood why.

I think intuitively I just felt very strongly that he would do or say certain things. I always knew what drove him at the heart of his character, but the reason we’d had to start ICoS over from the original bits we wrote (before it was ICoS) was precisely because I knew if we wrote this story, Boyd would change as a person. Slowly, awkwardly, and not always efficiently, but I knew he would start as very depressed, closed off, suicidal, and with no hope, to eventually become someone with confidence, hope, dreams, and love. It had to be a growth that made sense. He had to have faults along the way, and make mistakes, but he was never malicious in anything he did because that was never who he was. His flaws always drew back to his deep insecurity coupled with what he felt was his hopeless desire to be loved and wanted.

I think I used to drive Sonny nuts on that, because when we’d have hypothetical conversations in planning scenes far in advance he’d say “If Hsin did ___ what would Boyd do?” and my answer so often was, “Well, it depends…”

Anyway, I changed my mind a lot in editing, but rather than delete the scenes I used to put them in separate documents in case we later decided to reincorporate it. I also like the idea of maintaining history for situations exactly like this. In order to remind myself what each doc was I named them things to jog my memory.

Just now, I found one of my folders that was filled with such excerpts and other bits and pieces, and the file names amused me. In case anyone is interested in a glimpse of the weirdly messy-but-organized contradiction that is my mind, see the screenshot below– and click on it to make it larger if the words can’t be read.

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I think my favorite file name is “original whut im a killer convo.” I imagine Hsin sitting there with a D: face saying that to Boyd lol

(Not So Very) Important Conversations: How April Fool’s epilogue didn’t become a thing

(Not So Very) Important Conversations, or NSVIC, are excerpts from joking conversations Sonny and I had during the process of writing, editing, or otherwise working on ICoS.

This one is a joke about Fade’s epilogue, and even though I don’t think it contains spoilers past mid-Afterimage I’m still putting it behind a cut just in case.

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Scene Snip: A Beaulieu Thanksgiving

Thanksgiving at the Beaulieus. A snippet from Cedrick and Vivienne’s past. This was going to be part of a larger story but I never wrote much in it. Someday I will likely edit and rework this scene, and add it back into a backstory series. This is heavy on the explanatory narration but at the time it was written I was trying to note how I imagined they interacted.

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Fade research: chapter 40/41

This is the research I compiled regarding the huge spoiler for Fade chapter 40/41. For those of you who have read the series, this is regarding the thing that has major personal ramifications for one of the characters. Note: the research behind this cut may be uncomfortable for anyone who has particular feelings on the topic.

DO NOT READ BELOW IF YOU HAVE NOT READ THROUGH FADE CHAPTER 41. This information is a HUGE SPOILER. I’m serious.

Note: if you follow my blog on Goodreads, I posted this there as well on April 22, 2013. In fact, the rest of this post is a direct copy of that entry.

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What Might Have Been: An O’Connell Agency reunion

Over the years of writing In the Company of Shadows, we learned to be very fluid with our plot. There were some things we planned to do but when it came to that time in the story it just didn’t work anymore. Other times, we pushed a scene forward or back, or had to remove it altogether. Some plots were nixed, some were expanded. Some characters were supposed to reappear but the story was too compact to fit them. And more than once, I wrote multiple versions of the same scene well in advance of something I knew was coming, and by the time it appeared that scene changed dramatically.

Any post labeled What Might Have Been or WMHB is a sneak peek into what was planned but didn’t end up happening.

For the first post:

Caoilfhionn O’Connell, aka, Keelin

My favorite model inspiration for her so far is Anna Lutoskin from storm models.

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Keelin is Owen’s younger sister. She shows up in his side story -somnia, but that wasn’t supposed to be her only appearance. Keelin was going to end up working at the Agency. Most likely, she was going to become a civilian. There was also talk of her first appearing in the main series by meeting Hsin on a bus, probably in Afterimage.

One of the things that would have been interesting about her was how it would have not only shown a civilian’s adjustment to the Agency, but also how it would have affected Owen to have his little sister so close. And how she would have dealt with the same secrecy and lies already keeping Owen apart from his family.

But when the time came when she could have appeared, it didn’t work to add her into the plot. There was too much else going on and Boyd and Hsin both are far too focused on themselves and their own problems to have noticed any shenanigans she was up to in the background. And doing an Owen POV just to have her involved would have broken up the flow of the story too much.

So, in the end, she only showed up in -somnia and was mentioned briefly in Fade. Someday, I might write a story focusing on her. I had been looking forward to writing her so I was a little sad when it turned out she didn’t properly fit into the main plot line after all.